Monday, July 2, 2018

How to use dialogue

Focuses for writing this week
Explanation in my own words.
How to use speech marks
In the front and the end
How to put in other punctuation
Before the speech marks
When to start a new line or when to keep writing
When the person says something back and if you are still talking
Different words for ‘said’
Asked, replied, responded, yelled, screamed, shouted, mumbled, said, muttered, gasped, panting, chuckled, thought, told, uttered, continued, whispered
Adding adverbs
Responded politely, asked politely, screamed angrily,

“Who can I pick on?” asked Miss Ashley.
“Me” replied Timote.

“How was your day?” asked Hope.
“Great, thank you” replied Miss Ashley.

“How was your weekend” asked Dwyane.
“It was good” responded Havea.

If more than one person is talking, you put the reply underneath.
Mary was a beautiful girl who was wearing her long black hair in two plaits. She asked her mum, “can I go to the pools today?”.
“Why do you want to go” mum replied.
“It’s hot and I want to cool off”.
“Fine then”

If it’s only one person, you keep going.
Little red riding hood walked along the dirt path and thought to herself “I’m getting hungry”. She had walked a looooonng way but the thought of warm apple pie when she got to grandma’s house kept her going.

“Want to go park?”asked Timote
“Yes” Replied Paula.
“Do you want go to park”asked Timote
“yes” replied isaia.

“Do you have money”Asked Paula
“Why”Asked Timote
“To get some shoes”Said Paula
“Here take my money”Said Isaia


Friday, June 29, 2018


Start here:  one sunny hot day a man named david was to hot to stand out by the sun so he thought that he should go for a swim so he bring all the staff he needs. He didn't want to go pools he wanted to go by a huge mountain with a waterfall. He was maori and pakeha. First he got there he looked down and saw the blue fresh water so he decided to jump with his rope in the water so he jumped. Mean while the sun started to go down so he used the rope to get up when he got up he got changed and sit at the edge of the river fall and watched the sunset.

Finding descriptive language examples

Twinkle Twinkle star colours

Thursday, June 28, 2018

Tuesday, June 26, 2018

narrative plan

Brainstorm of ideas:
  • Car crash, people inside the car, fire fighters, not looking, fire-fighters, man was driving then suddenly he crashed into a pole, speeding, different kinds of services - police and ambulance. Flipped,
  • See - people standing around, glass on the ground, windshield or windscreen,  stop traffic, upside down, airbags, fire extinguishers,
  • smell/hear - gasoline or petrol or oil, smoke, sirens, people talking

Drunk driver, John Cena, 60 year old man,
Car crash
A witness calls the ambulance, police and fire service
No glasses so couldn’t see
injuries - broken arm, broken ribs, brain damage, cuts
Fire fighters use jaws of life to get the person out and save them. They cut the car in half.
On the phone
Petrol leak, and the engine was gonna blow up, so the whole car was gonna blow up.
Fire extinguisher, put saw dust on the petrol, get the people out first before it explodes.
Distracting - picking something up, or changing the radio station.

Car crash
2 sentences

Orientation 5-10 sentences
Lopi was a smart little boy who lived in Auckland. He was driving to go to work. He worked at the police station. He was a policeman. When Lopi go to work he saw a car crash.
5-10 sentences
He called the Firefighters and the Police. He ran to the car that crashed and tried to save the people in the car. He tried to open the door but he can’t even open it. Theres a little fire in the car.
5-10 sentences
The firefighters came and used the jaws of life to open the door. They take all the people out and the litttle fire got bigger. The firefighters get the hose and put the fire out.
Less than 5 sentences
Lopi keeps going to work.